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Didn't you know? by ~BeanyPumpky:iconBeanyPumpky:

Categories Literature > Poetry > Narrative > Open


When October descends and settles on my skin,
autumn leaves, delicately scalding,
glowing orange with yellow tinted red hot embers?
Faded ash smothering my skin,
floating down from a burnt out fire,
that has oxidised my heart?
Will you remember?
Remember that October is only the afterburn.
The aftershock.
After-effects of an invisible disaster
contained within the soul.

October is all that remains
while the tree sheds its leaves
and the leaves decompose

So when your October comes around, I’m sorry.
Maybe I’ll be there to shield you from the pain
But I’ll probably be off enjoying my thunderstorm
and dancing in the rain.
©2008-2009 ~BeanyPumpky
:iconbeanypumpky:

Author's Comments

Full title: Didn’t you know it’s dangerous to play with fire?

"If there's any beauty in death then it has to be in Autumn cos there is so much beauty and grace in a leaf falling to its death."

I hope October never comes.

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~plum-perfect Oct 30, 2008, 6:21:41 PM
i miss the days of summer that don't know autumn is just around the corner...

beautiful piece. i liked the use of metaphors and other such literary terminology i can't be bothered with remembering. regardless, absolutely lovely. <3

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"If music be the food of love..."

Comment my stuff and I'll adore you forever. (Good or bad critique, I value opinions :]).
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~BeanyPumpky Oct 30, 2008, 6:24:19 PM
Wow, thank you so much! :heart:
That means a lot to me; thank you for taking the time to read and comment :)

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'Stay out of the sun. Watch your back. And sharpen your knives.'
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~Suxinn Oct 30, 2008, 6:47:29 PM
This is really good. :heart:
I admire how well you can write poetry. I can't write poetry at all. ^^;

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I R INSANE.
PLEZ GIVE ME UR COOKIES.

~Inkshadow made my icon and she absolutely wins at life (and everything in between) <3
:iconbeanypumpky:
~BeanyPumpky Oct 30, 2008, 7:13:05 PM
Wow, thanks. Thanks for the fave too.:heart:

I'm not very poetic, to be fair. I'm sure you're a lot better than me, you just don't realize it.
But thank you anyway, I appreciate it :)

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'Stay out of the sun. Watch your back. And sharpen your knives.'
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~Larka-the-Wolf Oct 31, 2008, 6:06:39 AM
I like Autumn, tho I seem to always spell it wrongly.

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.......that's what she said.


And when Alexander saw the breadth of his domain, he wept for there were no more worlds to conquer.
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~bananacustard Nov 2, 2008, 10:31:02 AM
I like autumn, viewed from my window as I sit in a patterned arm chair, like something out of the good old ninties when everyone wore leggings and woolly jumpers, with the cat curled up by the fire, on a rug, a mug of something warm in my hands and CAKE!

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I'll sit under the stars and I'll play my guitar and I'll let the night draw to a close, and all who surround me will sing and they'll strum, and we'll all love the life that we chose.
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~InkShadows Nov 6, 2008, 6:11:55 PM
This is amazing. I really like your terminology. It really adds something to the piece I think. You also portrayed autumn beautifully in a way I hadn't really thought of before. I'm just dazzled by the colours I don't really realize what's happening too much until they aren't there anymore.
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~BeanyPumpky Nov 7, 2008, 4:52:20 PM
It has a pain in the arse spelling, I'll give you that.

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'Stay out of the sun. Watch your back. And sharpen your knives.'
:iconbeanypumpky:
~BeanyPumpky Nov 7, 2008, 4:58:32 PM
That's one of the best ways to watch autumn. I love thunderstorms while huddled in a tent or car. The raindrops make the most amazing sound and the lightning creates stunning effects reflecting in the water rivulets, especially on car windscreens. And dancing in the rain is the only time when I'll dance at all. Just so long as there's a warm fire or towel waiting for me...

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'Stay out of the sun. Watch your back. And sharpen your knives.'
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